Jay likes this rather a lot! And this made me lol: "He'll kill me and hide the body where no one will find it. Then he'll fire me and throw me out on the street. "
Although one thing - you might want to italicize the bits where Connor is thinking to himself - it was a little confusing, just being there in plain text/no signal that it had changed besides the changed pronoun. But still... OOOOOOH.
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Date: 2010-11-03 11:41 pm (UTC)Jay likes this rather a lot! And this made me lol: "He'll kill me and hide the body where no one will find it. Then he'll fire me and throw me out on the street. "
Although one thing - you might want to italicize the bits where Connor is thinking to himself - it was a little confusing, just being there in plain text/no signal that it had changed besides the changed pronoun. But still... OOOOOOH.